Antigone Cadmus

deux ex machine Deus ex machina, Anzius. :wink: God from a machine. The Latin Nerd, Tigs

Round Two! None of us knew what to do – there wasn’t anything to do. The word do becomes repetitive. Nix all the words after the hyphen. my watch was ...

I second Teague's recommendations.

The Gemma Doyle Trilogy by I forget the author's name?

Isn't the contest closed...? I can review this anyway if you like.... --Sakura

Just 'cause it's critically acclaimed doesn't make it good...

Hmmm... here are two good Young Adult fantasy series: --Pendragon by D.J MacHale --His Dark Materials by Phillip Pullman (These ones are not light reading!) --Keys to the Kingdom by ...

Part Deux Hey again, Anzius! Back for part two of my review. he looked quite young maybe twenty-something years old not much younger than me, :arrow: Comma before maybe. :arrow: ...

Of you were trying to make the conversation seem strained, it worked, but I wouldn't necessarily use it for a romance story. It makes every thing seems very awkward -- ...

:oops: Evi!!! Here I finally am! As you can tell, I'm so embarrassed about this delay that I am using multiple exclamation marks, which I normally think looks hideous. !!!!!!!!!!! ...

You still didn't fix any comma errors. :wink: You may not realize it, but it is extremely difficult to read this piece/chapter without an adequate amount of commas. Read this ...

Ah. I shall explain. So here are the two sentences: "Run!" cried the boy. "Aela, Aela." Worry crept into his voice. Cried is the verb for your sentence. Imagine dialogue ...

Ah. I shall explain. So here are the two sentences: "Run!" cried the boy. "Aela, Aela." Worry crept into his voice. Cried is the verb for your sentence. Imagine dialogue ...

Here I am again. ^_^ You only need to capitalize "Father" when it is taking the place of his name. For example: "Hello, Father!" If you were saying, "Hello, John!" ...

Review Part Two Hmmm... back to the whole "splattering blood" again. ^^ No matter how fast you are running, a simple graze of your knuckles, painful as it might be, ...